In this lesson we showcased our film to our film to the whole class in order to receive positive feedback e.g. what worked well and constructive criticism e.g. things that were used ineffectively and that we would be able to apply to our film in order to improve it, so this is a very important part of our editing and film composition.Primarily we showed it to the class in order for them to watch it carefully and constructively, so that they may give us input and feedback.
Whilst I was watching the film I myself made some critical comments in order to help us improve on what we have got. This included the following:
- the ratio of speech and music is very unbalanced- this is because when played on YouTube it was significantly quieter than the dialogue context scenes, so this is something we have to play around with and see if we can get it at the right level. However what was strange was that on Adobe the ratio between them was more or less balanced so perhaps it was the speakers used.
- Transitioning between shots particularly the argument scene wasn't smooth. For example the argument scene had part of the dialogue cut midway through a conversation, so that it gave quite a jolty effect.
Positive comments:
- They thought that the use of the non- diegetic love story soundtrack worked effectively in our film as it conveyed our Romantic Drama well.
- They liked the use of the of the juxtaposed 4 way split screen as it showed an unusual shot that had never been obtained before and as far as we know, we have never seen a film which has Incorporated a 4 way screen.
- They thought that there was a wide variety of shots which gave a the film a sense of diversity and uniqueness, even when it still had a number of generic conventions such as narrative and structure .
- They thought that the intertwining relationships between each of the characters was clearly conveyed e.g. the whole cheating on me scenario
Negative feedback
- The points that I had picked out was generally what was criticised and Miss Martin made particular emphasis on the transitioning and the soundtrack, so again we really need to focus on these particular points.
Outsider feedback
I then asked several people outside of Media to watch the video and make both positive and negative comments:
Nazifa
Positive comments
- The use of framing was good as it was centred in each shots and clearly established a particular emotion or scenario e.g. she liked the mirror scene where I was looking back at myself in disgust and how it transcended into the vomiting scene.
- She thought that the filming of shots was good and mostly steady
Negative comments
- The transitioning of shots at times weren't smooth and the argument scene was slightly shaky.
- Some of the voice overs were ineffective and ran at random points
- She did not like the use of the calligraphy font in the inter titles as she thought it appeared quite tacky in a sense, and felt that we should use a more standardised bold white font.
Cheryl
Positive comments
- She liked the mixture of voiceovers which were implemented by inter titles and felt that it worked well and made up for the minimal dialogue. She also said that this technique conformed to the generic conventions of the Romance genre
-She also liked the split shot and said that it was very unusual and went against the typical conventions
Negative comments
- She also said the transitioning of shots wasn't effective
- The narrative which I explained to her beforehand, parts of it wasn't evident in the film. For example the marriage between me and Chris was not clear as well as my cancer was not clearly portrayed as Cheryl said that without the background information that she had, she would have thought that both me and Amiee are pregnant, so she said we should of included a shot that made these two things clear e.g. the marriage shot that I had included in the script she said would have been really good.
Hannah
Postive feedback
- She liked the use of the voiceovers and titles and said that they worked effectively together, particularly the one over the bench scene where I say ' I need to talk to you about Chris' and then it dips to white and transcends into a shot of Amiee and Chris together kissing passionately.
Negative feedback
- She made the same general comments as everyone else and also said that we need to work on the structuring of the trailer.
To create a more immersive response we also shared our trailer on Facebook in order to have a wide selection of comments, since it is a social networking site.
I then picked the most useful comments to publish here both positive and critical to reinforce the other views made.
Strengths:
- Sarah it uses a variety of different shots that implement the fast paced narrative
- Kiran it cuts between slow and fast shots which creates tension and suspense
- Cheryl the use of the juxtaposed shot is really cleverly constructed and the way it has been used to start the film is original
Weaknesses:
-James although you try and play around with different shots, the transitioning and the continuity of shots is inconsistent
- Alex The soundtrack although good, is too quiet to denote a dramatic effect on the film that it should have
- Nazifa the use of editing is weak in some places i.e. in the argument scene, what should be effective is not since Chris's words are cut off before transcending into the next scene
What could we do to improve it?
- work on the cont-unity of some shots perhaps, re shooting if we have to
- Making the storyline more clearer, when we explained the original storyline to them it was not made clear that me and Chris were married and Cheryl suggested that we should have a wedding scene or a flashback to that day in order to implement that to the audience, which interestingly was one of my original ideas
What generic expectations does it fulfil?
- use of the traditional love triangle, only its ' interesting how you use a terminally ill person in it' Sarah
- Music composition reflects the ups and downs of love Amy
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